Bonjour, pourriez-vous me corriger si possible mon texte... Je dois le rendre et je préfère être sûre de moi... Merci énormément d'avance! :) George wanted to t
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Bonjour, pourriez-vous me corriger si possible mon texte... Je dois le rendre et je préfère être sûre de moi...
Merci énormément d'avance! :)
George wanted to talk with the cook since he didn't like his meal. He entered in the room:
- « What arer you doing in my kitchen? »
- « I apologize, yet I’m not satisfied of my meal. I wanna eat traditional Brit food » , explained George
- « I beg your pardon, I can do for instance Chutney for you princess » , whispered the cook
- « It’s not typical Brit! It’s Indian; This meal has been brought in Great Britain in the 19th century when the India was its colony . »
- « I don’t need your History class », replied the cook
- « Mind you, it could be always better than your continental cheesecake square, though-while, it is really junk food »
- « Are you kidding me? You gonna get out of my restaurant you’re so dumb », yelled angrily the cook
- « Relax It’s as you tell me that Pierogi is typical English! Explained quietly george, Australia was a Brits’ colony in the 16th century. So i’m demanding to eat typical English. However, I wanna add that »
- « Stop ! Stop talking ! » , shouted the cook, « You need a therapy, You have a trouble in your head ! Go out of my restaurant ! Now ! I don't be willing to know the History of Great Britain ! Go out ! «
- « on the whole, I had to go to the Chinese restaurant, I hope it will being better. Besides, they could have Stir Fry. Since a discrimination of... »
- « Go out ! » stopped angrily the cook .
Merci énormément d'avance! :)
George wanted to talk with the cook since he didn't like his meal. He entered in the room:
- « What arer you doing in my kitchen? »
- « I apologize, yet I’m not satisfied of my meal. I wanna eat traditional Brit food » , explained George
- « I beg your pardon, I can do for instance Chutney for you princess » , whispered the cook
- « It’s not typical Brit! It’s Indian; This meal has been brought in Great Britain in the 19th century when the India was its colony . »
- « I don’t need your History class », replied the cook
- « Mind you, it could be always better than your continental cheesecake square, though-while, it is really junk food »
- « Are you kidding me? You gonna get out of my restaurant you’re so dumb », yelled angrily the cook
- « Relax It’s as you tell me that Pierogi is typical English! Explained quietly george, Australia was a Brits’ colony in the 16th century. So i’m demanding to eat typical English. However, I wanna add that »
- « Stop ! Stop talking ! » , shouted the cook, « You need a therapy, You have a trouble in your head ! Go out of my restaurant ! Now ! I don't be willing to know the History of Great Britain ! Go out ! «
- « on the whole, I had to go to the Chinese restaurant, I hope it will being better. Besides, they could have Stir Fry. Since a discrimination of... »
- « Go out ! » stopped angrily the cook .
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1. Réponse Kaylie64Wuliuxin
Coucou ^^
Alors, ton texte est vraiment très bien, mais j'ai cependant pu en relever quelques erreurs (sans oublier la mise en forme d'un dialogue écrit et la ponctuation surtout -_____-') ^________^'
Voici donc ton texte que j'ai corrigé ci dessous :
George wanted to talk with the cook since he didn't like his meal. He entered in the room :
« What are you doing in my kitchen ?
- I apologize, yet I’m not satisfied of my meal. I wanna eat traditional Brit food, explained George.
- I beg your pardon, I can do for instance Chutney for you princess, whispered the cook.
- It’s not typical Brit ! It’s Indian. This meal has been brought in Great Britain in the 19th century when the India was its colony.
- I don’t need your History class, replied the cook.
- Mind you, it could be always better than your continental cheesecake square, though-while, it is really junk food.
- Are you kidding me? You gonna get out of my restaurant you’re so dumb », yelled angrily the cook.
- Relax It’s as you tell me that Pierogi is typical English! Explained quietly george, Australia was a Brits’ colony in the 16th century. So i’m demanding to eat typical English. However, I wanna add that.
- Stop ! Stop talking !, shouted the cook, You need a therapy. You have a trouble in your head ! Go out of my restaurant ! Now ! I don't be willing to know the History of Great Britain ! Go out !
- On the whole, I had to go to the Chinese restaurant, I hope it will being better. Besides, they could have Stir Fry. Since a discrimination of...
- Go out !, stopped angrily the cook.
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En fait, il n'y avait que le "are" qui était à réécrire ^.^'
Je suis désolée ^^'
Bonne soirée à toi ^^